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Academic teaching is important for passing the exam, and other skills such as cooking or dressing should be not taught. To what extend you agree or disagree

#exam #skills
In contemporary society, some academies or schools believe that academic
skills
 that were required in the exam like Mathematics or Physics are much more important than other
skills
 like cooking or dressing and those
skills
 should not teach in the institute. I extremely disagree with
this
 idea and
this
 essay will explain why I do not agree with
this
 argument.
First
 of all, in my opinion,
school
 or the academy is the place where children can learn everything they want and get the experience from their life as much as possible to prepare for their adulthood.
Moreover
,
school
 is
also
 a small society where
students
 can learn the life-subject that may affect or contribute to their future
skills
 or job selection like talking
skills
 or time management
skills
.
In addition
, basic
skills
 like cooking, dressing skill, and communication skill are important to teach the
students
 in the class too, because these skill help children can get confidence while living in the world after they graduated from the institute.
Furthermore
, reducing the academic subject's time and giving the chance to
students
 to study the
skills
 that they want to learn can make
students
 stay more motivated, active and not bored going to
school
. To conclude, I would say that the
school
 or the academy should give more choice to
students
 to learn in the extra subject which they want to learn
instead
 let the
students
 study only the academic
skills
 in the class could make the student study much more effectively .
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