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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or diagree?

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I couldn't agree more with the given statement, That today consumer expenditure on products depends on marketing, because nowadays people like to represent themselves as a brand in that case we have to represent in the same way
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 the main cause of the increase in market-driven sales. Now, If we look at the major sales of the company
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 we have to admit that people like to lean on the products that have major sales on them. particularly those which are highly advertised
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; Apple is a fantastic product but the catch is that it doesn't sell millions of products to new audiences every year. consumers are purchasing them every year again and again which is a prime example of a solid marketing strategy. moving on, if we understand a company like Samsung whose main market share is coming from the consumer commodity they spent a lot of Research on which area that that product can cater to the audience, along with that they took the survey from strangers and from existing customers as well, to make the brand visible to newer too,
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; community like more LG units in commodities market due to its quality, almost maintenance free and most of all life of the items are more. If we understand the need for it we can see its importance of it. In ,conclusions advertising is apparent in
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 current environment due to its need to build brands in
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 aggressive market. we can see that brands are understanding the user's needs and adverting the same way.
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