some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages

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Few
people
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live their whole life in their birthplace.There could be many reasons for
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, and it has both advantages and disadvantages but I personally believe it
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more cons
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pros. Let
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is
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discuss
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further
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upcoming
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paragraphs.
Currently
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everything is accessible
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just
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fingertips
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many
people
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then
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also
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believe staying in
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place is more convenient as friends and family are close for any time support.The place where one spends whole childhood
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familiar and easy to stay
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to migrate
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city and start from zero
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could be really stressful. In a survey in New York
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it has been found that around 50
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of
people
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will not
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their city for
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salary
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instead
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but instead
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manage with
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their current
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income.
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Furthermore
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the
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of living in
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a born
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place
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that the dearer
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always present for any support. There is no need to
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the ethics
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or ritual
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being followed since birth. Now,
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the sense of security and comfort in itself is
benefit
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the benefit
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of living close to someone's birthplace in a broad and abstract sense. While the disadvantages include these
people
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may lose
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opportunities because of
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mindset as they will have to accept job
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which
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available locally with less pay.
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they might not be
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up to
date with
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situation. In
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one should be always open to
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and new opportunities as it is believed that we always have one
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change
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chance
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to
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ourselves so it
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better
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to
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get out of
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our comfort
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zones take
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a risk
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risk
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risks
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and live life as per our terms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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