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11. (16/04/2016) In the future, it seems it will be more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Binh
Dinh
 (1)
_____
a
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province
 situated in the South Central Coast region
in
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 Vietnam. Like other beautiful provinces in
this
 region,
Binh
Dinh
 is well-known (2) ____
its
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 natural beauty with beaches, isles, capes, etc. Top 3
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attractions
atractions
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attractions
 you must visit in
Binh
Dinh
province
. Ky Co is a (3)
______
 beach which was located (4)
_____
 the heart of the
Binh
Dinh
province
 in Vietnam. The beach is very famous for its white
sands
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beautiful atmosphere. (5)
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 beach is suitable for several water sports
also
. Quang Trung museum:
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is a museum dedicated to the National hero Quang Trung.
This
 is a historic landmark attracting both Vietnamese (6)
_____
 foreign researchers and tourists which was inaugurated in 1978. t is one of the largest museums dedicated to famous Vietnamese personalities. It is
also
 one of the busiest attracting researchers and tourists. Thị Nại Port is the
second
 (7)
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 port in Bình Định
Province
, Vietnam. It is located in Hai Cang ward at the eastern tip of Quy Nhơn (8) ___. In 2009, 644 tons of goods were handled (9)
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 Thị Nại Port, of which 113 tons (10)
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exported and 3 tons
imported
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