Teenagers are facing more problems these days as compared to old days. The reason is that parents are spending less time at home. Agree or Disagree.

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have time to spend with their kids. in
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way children are doing wrongful things and
then
face many problems. I
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of all, the reason is inflation. people need to make more money
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their basic needs. they are working like machines and owing to
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, they can not spare their time for their children. so, children get
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and spend more time with friends.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pervasive influence
  • moderated by
  • family dynamics
  • dual-income households
  • demands of work
  • neglect of
  • emotional and developmental needs
  • risky behaviors
  • substance abuse
  • seek attention and validation
  • broader societal
  • economic and technological factors
  • mitigate issues
  • prioritizing quality time
  • open lines of communication
  • actively participating
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