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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 25 words

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In recent years, misconceptions and false news are so widely spread, thanks to the internet. There has been a rise in the number of people choosing to experiment with alternate ways of medicine due to various rumours about the effectiveness of medications that are backed by science. In
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 essay, I will share why I think
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 is a disadvantage to humanity and share my personal experience. The ill effects of alternative cures are myriad. Since there is no governing body to conduct quality control or perform human trials to ensure the medication is effective, these treatments could prove to be fatal for a few people. Individuals with pre-existing
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 conditions due to old age or diseases must be very careful as the methods of
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 complicate their
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. The administrators of alternative medicine often do not have credentials to prove their knowledge of the
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 procedures. In countries like India, age-oldage old
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 methods are popular with people and there are several scamsters who run unscientific procedures to cure illnesses. They
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 create fear and spread misinformation regarding science-based medical treatments. Recently, during the COVID pandemic, my neighbour took a herbal concoction which is marketed as a cure for coronavirus and has experienced severe
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 complications. He was admitted to an emergency ward and treated for a week to recover from the illness. Every one of us must give utmost importance to our
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 and be careful of what we put our bodies through. We must believe in scientific advancements in medicine and avoid any alternate ways of
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 treatments. One must always consult a qualified general physician for the diagnosis and
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 of any illness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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