The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norriton, and planned future development of the site.
The two maps illustrate
a
Correct article usage
the
currently
industrial area of Norbiton and the planned development.
Change the word
current
Overall
, the goal is to redevelop into a residential neighborhood
, with additional housing and other supporting facilities.
Currently, there is a roundabout Change the spelling
neighbourhood
Correct pronoun usage
that connects
connects
a southern and an eastern Wrong verb form
connecting
road
. Furthermore
, there are several factories in the area that are to be removed in the redevelopment.
The area around the eastern road
is to be for housing, a school at the end
, and a playground to the north. Another road
is planned to be added north from
the roundabout. The farmland north of Change preposition
of
river
is to be replaced by housing. There are Add an article
the river
also
plans to construct another road
from the roundabout. More housing is to be built.
To the southern
of the roundabout, shops are planned to be constructed. Across the street to the southeast is to be a medical Replace the word
south
center
. A second roundabout is Change the spelling
centre
also
to be added.Submitted by sirawan on
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