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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norriton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norriton, and planned future development of the site.
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The two maps illustrate
a
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the
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currently
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current
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 industrial area of Norbiton and the planned development.
Overall
, the goal is to redevelop into a residential
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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, with additional housing and other supporting facilities. Currently, there is a roundabout
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that connects
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connects
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connecting
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 a southern and an eastern
road
.
Furthermore
, there are several factories in the area that are to be removed in the redevelopment. The area around the eastern
road
 is to be for housing, a school
at the end
, and a playground to the north. Another
road
 is planned to be added north
from
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of
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 the roundabout. The farmland north of
river
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the river
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 is to be replaced by housing. There are
also
 plans to construct another
road
 from the roundabout. More housing is to be built. To the
southern
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south
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 of the roundabout, shops are planned to be constructed. Across the street to the southeast is to be a medical
center
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centre
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. A second roundabout is
also
 to be added.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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