In many parts of the world, it is common for one parent to stay at home and raise a new born child while the other works full-time to earn money. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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countries
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people do the
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full-time jobs and stay at
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upbringing.
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of the statement outweigh its disadvantages
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are described in the following paragraphs. There are
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of reasons behind staying at
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minors. The foremost one is providing them adequate lifestyle as parents get sufficient time to study the children and play with them, which ultimately foster them to be
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citizen
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to the teachers at school as well as
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.
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know
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science and his child is
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the
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same subject, he can teach him to get more marks in
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science.
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is
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in playing
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gadgets in the
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absence
absense
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absence
of the parents.
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at the residence, the inflow of finance gets shrinks, which
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the adolescents to attain high-quality education in
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top-notch schools and colleges.
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person stays at the
home
and teaches his children and does
household-chores
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household chores
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, he is unable to assist his
companinion
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companion
to increase the inflow of funds to
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strengthen
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the financial condition of the house. All in all,
although
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several
severl
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merits of working full-time to earn notes for the betterment of the family, the adverse effects of staying at
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and
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nurturing
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children cannot be neglected.
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at
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house
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and contributing
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teenagers.
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