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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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A group of authorities opines that learning a foreign language at primary school
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 more effective than other levels of education.
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, there are some benefits and drawbacks
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 believer in studying that at
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 level and I think the positive points outweigh the negative aspects. In
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 essay, both aspects will be mentioned. On one side, one of the most important benefits of
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 is helping children to become familiar with other cultures and different costumes. It's apparent that when they start to study a foreign
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language
tongue
 at the same time, they hear about their traditions, history and the living condition of people.
Besides
, younger pupils are more flexible to accept a different language and culture
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 older people because their
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 are far more ready to learn and achieve them.
Moreover
, when we give children a chance to familiarize themselves with other
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tongues
, they can communicate easily with other nations from
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 distant region in future, because, they learn not only their languages but
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 they detect their unusual and weird costumes.
On the other hand
, it can be a difficult program for pupils, because they like more to spend their school time with other classmates and do
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 like playing or painting while that might not be an exciting activity for them.
Moreover
, it could have a negative effect on their
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 of learning because it makes a hectic schedule and causes a feeling of tiredness for children. In conclusion,
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 learning due to decreasing their motivation, it helps them to receive information about various cultures that allow them to communicate easily with other nations in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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