Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #diseases

Nowadays, in our society vaccinating

children

against diseases that can be prevented is becoming unpopular. The people who do not prefer

vaccination

claim that vaccinating is just not necessary at the same time it is dangerous for the

children

This

essay will argue why vaccinating

children

against preventable diseases is extremely important despite some initial health risks. As

children

tend to get some reaction or sickness due to

vaccination

, parents are reluctant to vaccinate them most of the time. Sickness due to

vaccination

can get worse and

children

might have to suffer much for that. So, it is justified to some extent from the parent’s perspective to be reluctant to vaccinate their

children

For instance

, due to the post-COVID

vaccination

, I got a high fever and extreme body pain for almost 3 days and after that, I became really weak. But the

children

are very small and in most cases, they are just toddlers so it is way more difficult for them to tolerate the side effects of the vaccine.

This

fear has established the concept in parents’ minds to think that vaccines are unnecessary and a possible reason for getting sick.

On the other hand

vaccination

is necessary to prevent dangerous diseases in the future that can become a reason for extreme sickness. If

children

are vaccinated previously

then

they might not catch that disease or what if they get the disease but it will not attack them to an extreme extent

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For example

, my nephew got jaundice

last

year but as he was vaccinated previously it could not attack him that much and he got well really fast whereas I did not get a jaundice shot in my childhood and 7 years ago I got jaundice and I had to be hospitalized for 10 days to get well again. So, it can be said that despite the

children

can get sick due to

vaccination

but it will help their immunity to be stronger in the future.

This

essay argued that the people who believe

vaccination

is unnecessary

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some misconceptions about the importance of vaccinating their

children

. In my opinion, though

vaccination

has some side effects, for the time being, it is essential to boost

children

’s immunity.

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In a nutshell
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2Word repetition
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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

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Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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