Some children spend hours every day on smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Undoubtedly, The impact of new technology development induces many
children
to spend most of their time
on smartphones
nowadays. From my viewpoint, It has so many reasons why they use
it although
it gives a negative development.
To begin
with, children
are of learning age. They always want to try and learn new things every day, including how to use
smartphones
. Smartphones
are tools which are used to communicate with people throughout the world. It is a very useful tool. However
, it has some problems when children
use
smartphones
because many children
get addicted to it easily by social media on smartphones
they watch videos on Tiktok or Youtube, and they don’t want to do their homework or do some exercise anymore. Moreover
, some students lack communication skills because they don’t speak to anyone , only focus on their mobiles and after they use
mobiles for a long time
, they will have eyes problem because of focusing on a small screen with radiation which has some negative effects on the eyes. These negative effects of using mobile will give many negative developments on children
, for example
, they will lose their focus on their studies and think about using smartphones
or social media all the time
.
In conclusion, in my ,opinion using smartphones
in children
will bring many negative developments. Children
should concentrate on their studies more than spending time
with smartphones
because if they are mostly focusing on smartphones
or social media, it will lead to a lack of education in the future.Submitted by pramai177 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite