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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you found it difficult to work. Write your letter to the accommodation office at your college - Describe the situation - Explain your problems and why it is difficult to work - Say what kind of accommodation you prefer

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Dear Mr Ram, I am a
third
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-semester student, studying science in your college and I have been living in the college hostel room, sharing with another student. I am writing
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the arrangements of the room. The dom in which we are living is too small for two students.
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, there is an unavailability of study tables, along with improper ventilation and air-conditioning.
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, with these discrepancies, it's been quite difficult to study and live here. Sometimes, we have to keep its door open to get some fresh air and
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 invites hostel disturbance.
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, in these situations, it would be difficult for me to focus on my studies.
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, I would like to request you to allocate some other dom. Whether on sharing basis, but with all the basic amenities. I hope you would understand my circumstances and allocate me another room. Yours sincerely, Shivam
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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