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Some people believe that having a university qualification is important for a happy life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely acknowledged that education is one of the most crucial and fundamental things for
people
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 currently. Some
people
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 support the opinion that
university
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 qualifications
such
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 as a
bachelor
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degree
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,
master
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master's
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degree
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, and doctoral
degree
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 are crucial and advantageous for a delightful life.
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, from my point of view, I disagree with
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. In the following paragraphs, the reasons to support my disagreement will be outlined.
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 of all, I strongly believe that the population should have the right to make their own decisions.
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 some
people
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 need to open their own business, become a Youtuber or make income from
stock
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 market rather than graduate from
university
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 or study
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 academic
degree
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 to acquire a government job, become a doctor, or engineer because
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 have different thinking. It is undeniable that sometimes
people
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 who did not graduate from
university
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 cannot achieve their objectives for various reasons
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 as budget, knowledge, and experience.
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, others without a
university
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 qualification have the capability and
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 in their life because
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something called " experience cannot be found in the classroom, it can be achieved by trying and practising as soon as possible. that means it does not depend on a
university
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 qualification to make life delightful.
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, it depends on which choices and talent
people
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 can achieve or not. In conclusion, I personally disagree with
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 viewpoint because it seems to me that the advantages of
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 without a
university
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 qualification outweigh the disadvantages and depend on experience and budget.

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