As parts of education, students should spend a period of time living in another country to learn its language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In our society, many juveniles
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spend time on their smartphones.
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essay agrees, that
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smartphones
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generation is a negative
development
, which
causes
addiction, slow
development
and even mental diseases.
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, spending hours on
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smartphones often turns
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the
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habit, and
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,
to
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addiction. But why
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teenagers fall into the trap of The World Wide Network? Mainly, owing to various and flexible content.
Tik Tok
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is a prime example of
successful
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social network,
where
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shown
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short videos on each taste.
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, in reality, in social
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there
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more low-grade information, than useful and educational. Undoubtedly, it
causes
slow
development
of the child, since he does not
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acquire
require
aquire
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acquire
knowledge,
instead
, he is addicted
with
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his phone.
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, often spending
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leisure time on
the
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games
causes
mental diseases.
Trouble
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of
games
is a really relevant and serious question. Many
games
are influence
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negatively on person’s mental health.
For instance
,
games
such
as GTA, Counter-Strike,
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normalizes
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murders,
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, jails and monsters. According to the statistics, many killers played shouter and horror
games
in their childhood, which
consequently
made worse their mental health.
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, mental diseases
connected
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not only with
games
,
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but
moreover
, with social networks. Many children nowadays
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suffer from
cyberbulling
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cyberbullying
.
Cyberbulling
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Cyberbullying
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in
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the Internet, which
even
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more adverse and dangerous, since parents often do not see with whom their child chatting. Teenagers can be hurt because of their weight, appearance and even nationality. Unfortunately,
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in
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usually
causes
suicides. To sum up, I would reiterate, that trends
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the
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mobile phones
is
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an absolutely negative
development
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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