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The bar charts provide information about the proportion of employment by gender between 2005 and 2015.

 Overall, the percentage of male employees in Canada, South Korea and Sweden are all higher than those of female ones during the period.
In addition
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, the Canadian and the Korean rates exhibited upward trends, whereas working men in Sweden showed a downward trend.

 Swede male workers were at 78% in 2005, which was the largest number, and
then
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 marginally fell to 70%, the same as the number of which Canadian guys in 2015.
In contrast
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, the female Swede saw a slight growth from 45% to half a hundred per cent in ten years. 

It is worth noting that women in Canada saw the greatest difference in employment rates, which was at 38% at the beginning and
then
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 went up to 55% end of the period.
Moreover
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, the number of employed girls in South Korea came in
last
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, at 30% in 2005, and increased to 35% in 2015, which was half of the Canadian and Swede workers.
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