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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Some nations have a large number of young
people
, compared with older
people
, and it is argued whether it is more beneficial or not. On the one hand, it could improve the economic status of a country with many young adults. They are in the working-class, unable to put more effort into work, and
also
 more likely to spend more money than older
people
.
Also
, living in a nation with
lots
 of young
people
 will create a working atmosphere of open-mindedness, freedom and flexibility. In that case,
people
 could have more possibility to try new things, discover a new way to sell products, invent new items or develop a better system. Take my company in Taipei
for example
, Taipei is the capital of Taiwan, and
lots
 of young
people
 live over there. Our company focuses on equal communication and creativity, encouraging employees to pursue
personal
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 fulfilling life.
On the other hand
, it might cause
lots
 of big changes in a short
time
,
in other words
, it would be
less
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 steady environment. Older
people
 might not able to put more energy into work, but their experiences are valuable.
People
 could learn from mistakes in the past, and reduce the cost of
time
 as the result.
For instance
, a big company would
much
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likely hire an experienced candidate
instead
 of a candidate without experience but ambition. As the old saying goes,
time
 is money, young
people
 might take
lots
 of
time
 on trying their idea, but old
people
 could give some advice for them to reduce the cost of
time
. Even though young adults might be more creative and energetic, a lack of experience might cause big damage in the end. Due to
this
 assumption, I would say the advantages of more young
people
 in a country don't outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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