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Some people think only best students should be rewarded, while others think we should reward students who make progress.Discuss these two points and give your opinion.

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Encouragement is one of the biggest problems that many teachers and
students
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, what type of student should be rewarded is a controversial issue. In my opinion, rewarding the
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 who make
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 is the best way for all the
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. It is obvious that the best
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 should be rewarded.
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 means that the best
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 study hard and always help other
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. Some of them will lose their ambitions and even motivation if they do not receive the
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.
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, giving
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 to the best
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 means nobody will be against it.
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, we need to notice that we cannot only reward the best
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 but ignore the
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 who are making
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. Sometimes, there is little space between the best
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 and the most advanced
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. If we only give
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 to the best
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, other
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 will be disappointed. In fact, there are several advanced
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 in one class.
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, if we provide
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 to progressing
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, they will feel it is not very difficult to get benefits. so that more and more
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 like to imitate them. For the teacher, managing a class will become easier. I think we should focus on lots of
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 who are making
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 and give
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 to them immediately. Meanwhile, at the same time, we need to deliver more benefits to the best
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. Since they can play a role in leading all the other
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 to make
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. In conclusion, giving
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 to progressing
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 is a driving force behind all the
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. It is
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 a skill for all teachers.
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