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Nowadays, many people live an unhealthy lifestyle. What are the reasons for this and how do we address this problem?

#people #lifestyle #address
It is a hot issue that many
people
 are living
on
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unhealthy
lifestyle
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in
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these years. In my opinion,
this
 is because that
lots
 of
people
who
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have great stress at their workplace and
affected
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 by
disadvantage
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advertisement
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advertisements
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 through all kinds of social media. Making
a
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 excellent
job
 performance is
a
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 aid that many
people
 want to achieve. Since they could get not only
higher
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 salary from
job
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the job
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 but
also
 more
confident
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for
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 themselves. So
lots
 of
people
 studying and working hard
everyday
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 without
have
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 a rest, even during break-
time
, they are continuing their
job
.
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, you can see
lots
 of
people
 are doing their
job
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a laptop
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laptop
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 on the train which is on their way to work in the morning. You
also
 can see many
people
 over
time
everyday
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 until midnight.
Time
 for them is
wealthy
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 so they don’t want to spend any
time
 on their meals.
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, eating fast
food
 is a popular lifestyle for them. Everyone knows that fast
food
 is the most unhealthy
food
. The other reason is
disadvantage
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 advertisements. Nowadays, technology is developing
in
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 high speed.
Lots
 of social media increased very fast that give
people
 different
choice
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choices
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. At the same
time
, plenty of advertisements which showed in
media
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 will affect
people
. Some of them are
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advantage
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advantages
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 but some are
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a disadvantage
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disadvantage
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disadvantages
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, including unhealthy
food
. Some
people
 eat
the
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unhealthy
food
 because they like the advertisement. To resolve
this
 problem, I suggest that reducing unhealthy
food
 advertisements is a way and can prevent
people
 watch
it
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them
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. The other method
is encourage
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people
decrease
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 stress and do some
exercises
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exercise
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, at the same
time
enhance
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 education about
what
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the
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benefit
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people
 will get from healthy
food
. I believe
people
 will refresh and full of energy when they change to
healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle.
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