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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign countries. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

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In
this
 educational era, everyone is trying to take admitted to a good institution. A lot of children preferred to study abroad
instead
 of
their
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 own country of origin. In
this
 essay, both advantages and disadvantages will be discussed before reaching a lucid conclusion.
To begin
 with, studying at foreign universities is more effective than the own country.
In addition
, the postgraduates who have done their degree from a foreign institution have a better chance of getting a job.
For instance
, in
pakistan
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Pakistan
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, 69% of doctors having aboard degrees are selected on their
first
 attempt at the job interview.
Secondly
, studying out of the country is more convenient.
Further
, foreign departments provide well-furnished apartments near the college to their students.
Therefore
, they have no worries about travelling or cooking meals.
For example
, in Germany, every college has its hostels near the campus.
Further
, studies in foreign universities are preferable.
On the other hand
, there are some cons.
Firstly
, every foreign university requires high dues.
Furthermore
, the residence and fees are very costly.
Secondly
, the level of study abroad is different from ours.
Therefore
, they took highly talented students.
Thirdly
, it can not be easy to live at distance fr family because it affects mental health. In the conclusion,
although
 studying abroad is fair enough and excellent for a better future but it is not as easy as anyone thinks.
Lastly
, despite
toughness
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 everyone wants to get admission to a foreign college or university.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Specialized courses
  • Personal growth
  • Financial strain
  • Tuition
  • Cultural differences
  • Isolation
  • Homesickness
  • Educational systems
  • Academic performance
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