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Beside a lot of advantages, some people believe that the Internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #internet
In our modern life, the
Internet
 has become an integral part of
people
's lives.
Therefore
, some
people
 claim that the
internet
 has many benefits. But some teenagers say that despite its advantages, it
also
 has disadvantages. In today's advanced age,
internet
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 is very useful for
people
 because now everything is available on
internet
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.
For example
, you can watch anywhere in the world from your home.
In addition
, you can work from home or order the things you need.
For example
, when I'm too busy studying, I can't cook and I can order the food I want online. It
also
 helps me a lot in my studies because I can find information on the
internet
 that I don't know and use it. Some
people
 say that despite its benefits, it
also
 has its drawbacks.
First
 of all, not everything on the
Internet
 is true and up to the mark, so it is difficult to distinguish between fake and real news on the
Internet
.
Also
, on the
Internet
,
people
 who want to analyze everything on the
Internet
 can post it.
Also
,
people
 can get too attached to the
internet
 and
as a
result
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 it makes
people
 lazy.
Then
this
 condition causes them to get various diseases. In conclusion, there are two sides to everything, including the
Internet
. Most importantly, it helps
people
 to be in constant contact with each other. If everyone uses it correctly and wisely, it will be very useful for
people
.
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