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There are some families with children which relocate frequently. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Due to a rapid spread of a phenomenon called
globalization
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 a few families take advantage of an easier process of relocation and change their place of residence on a regular basis. Despite the fact, that relocation opens new career prospects for adults,
children
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 suffer from severe implications since it is difficult for them to leave behind friends and adjust to new circumstances. Generally speaking,
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labor
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 markets of emerging countries are red-hot. Not only do they quite often suffer from high rates of unemployment, but
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 GDPs per capita of
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 nations are on the bottom line. So low are average salaries that families decide to move to other places without considering
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 ambiguities or complexities. Parents wish nothing more than to be able to raise their
children
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 in abundance. Developed countries’ migration rates are prevailing because of career opportunities
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 governments may offer. Relocating enables people to raise
family’s
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their family’s
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 living standards, afford good housing, pay for high-quality education for their kids and, overall, be financially stable. Confidence in the future is what money is all about. It is evident to every parent that raising
children
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 costs a fortune. Doubtless, obtaining a higher salary at a new place will help with
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 issue. What some parents tend to forget while moving is their
children
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’s mental state. Youngsters may put on a brave face but inside they are fearful and anxious. Healthy child development is best supported by security and stability across different domains in the child’s life. Relocated adolescents face a double fear of adapting to an alien environment, a new school, and building new friendships and social networks.
Children
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 with unstable housing suffer from mental illnesses.
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 comes loneliness as
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children
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 are incapable of maintaining long-term close relationships. Without any doubt, moving has different effects at different ages, but one thing applies to all of them and it is the fact that
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process
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 adds to the stress. In conclusion, even though relocating can significantly change
families
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 earnings, it is
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 stressful for
children
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, disrupting their academic skills as well as emotional functioning.
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 important decisions require careful examination of all the consequences and implications for both sides.

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