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Governments are prohibiting underage children from getting full time jobs in certain countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days,humanity builds extremely big buildings.For the most part of these buildings use as a company's R&D centre. Big buildings create big fees like
,
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huge rent prices and enormous bills.Occasionally some of the
companies
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 owners and managers of the HR department do calculation mistakes and they try to blame low-status colleagues.These breadwinner people make redundant periodically.
This
 laid-off situation breaks their courage humans.That affects everyone
next
 to him.The owner of the
companies
 should be less prejudicial. In my opinion,owners should be more considerate of low-status workers.Generally, low-status labours could be keystones for
companies
.When you fire
this
 kind of conscientious people,you can be lost a huge amount of money.They have to inspect it elaborately. To
this
 extent,they can detect the real problem maker or guilty workers. Every company desire to be one of the greatest manufacturers in the world.For
this
 reason, you have to offer decent wages to your workers.Most of the big company owners give satisfaction money to their squad.That's why
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we called them "Big community".If you want to announce yourself like them all over the world you have to move in their steps.
Nevertheless
,great numbers of various
companies
 try to find a shortcut.Sadly, a remarkable amount of associations
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 struggles for themself and they can't pass the obstacles which they create.For
this
 reason,they lose their way and vanish from the market.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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