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Some believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between the rich and poor people, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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As we move into the new millennium, one trend has overwhelmed our concerns and
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 the innovations of technology in the ever-changing world. Opinions are divided on whether these advanced technological devices widen the gap between the wealthy and the underprivileged people or whether
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 development can bridge the disparity between the two classes of society. While there are certain reasons why some advocate the former view, I am still in favour of the latter. Those who reckon that cutting-edge technologies extend the gap in these classes may have the main argument. From their point of view, only the upper classes are able to purchase the digital advances supporting effectively in a wide range of sectors.
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 can be obviously seen in developing countries, notably Vietnam, where the poor are not affordable for artificial organs.
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, impoverished humans cannot receive high quality in the healthcare sector, leading to decreasing the productivity of the labour force.
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 example bears witness to why some regard
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 trend as detrimental effects on the poor.
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, I still believe that the burgeoning growth of technologies provides individuals with the ideal opportunities to gain a sufficient income for several reasons. Chief among these is that students living in rural areas can increase the chance of receiving a good education via media platforms
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 as Google, which information resources are free of charge.
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 cannot only help them save their tuition fee but
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 allocate that money for learning hands-on skills. Another reason worth mentioning is that with the immense benefits of smartphones, people even in the indigent class can obtain one, which is not extravagant, in order to keep themselves abreast of current affairs, regardless of location and use the applications in the phone to market their products through Shopee or Tiki.
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 enables them to bring considerable revenue and makes it easier to become well-off in the future. In conclusion, despite acknowledging why some may argue that on account of
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 tendency, society might witness significant discrimination based on money, I still hold the belief that by enhancing technological equipment, humans can meet a better living standard.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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