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The bar chart given illustrates the average amount of rain every year in Moscow and
San
 Francisco. Overall, it can be easily observed that the
rainfall
 in these two cities shows an opposite trend. The amount of rain in Moscow surpasses that in
San
 Francisco during the summer and
autunm
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autumn
 from May to October, while the
rainfall
 in
San
 Francisco is dominant
in
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 the rest part of the year. The average
rainfall
 in Moscow begins at about 55
milllimetres
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millimetres
 , which witnesses a slight drop to 38
milllimetres
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millimetres
 from January to April, before
dramastically
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dramatically
 increasing to 90 mm in June.
Then
 it stays steady for 2 months, followed by a decline with fluctuations from August to December. The
rainfall
 in
San
Fracisco
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Francisco
 peaked at 118 mm in the
first
 two months, and
then
 it plummeted, reaching the bottom at 0 mm in July and August. Afterwards, there is a rapid rise in it, returning to the highest and beginning a new cycle.
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