Some people believe that the salaries paid to professional sportspeople are too high, while others argue that sports salaries are fair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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professional sportspeople's
salary
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is becoming a highly charged issue , which
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regard
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as too higher than the figure they should
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. in my opinion , I completely agree that
athletes
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deserved to gain
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higher
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will be
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discussed
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. on the one hand ,
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can't create
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of employment
oppotunity
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opportunity
or
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actual
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interest
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interest
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and individuals.
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business man
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gain wealth because they create
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plenty
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plenty
of employment
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opportunity
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and professional musician earn money though attract
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to go to
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which let
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to
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enjoy music.
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, it's hard to let
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to
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pay for watching some activities ,
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like lift , and
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can not create
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of position for society. somethings , the higher
salary
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be
regardedad
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regarded
as an unreasonable situation.
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, the
salary
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payed
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paid
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by
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the market
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.
lots
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of
athletes
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earn
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apply
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higher
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by attracting
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of audiences ,
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as soccer ball
player
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players
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.
futher
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further
more ,
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tend to invite
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to
be
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a
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represent
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figure
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, which is
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an
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mian
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a
way of income for
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,and
further
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lead
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to
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well-
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well-known
knowed
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known
brand
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that make those companies
to
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create more employment which is
an
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non-direct way to contribute to the economy of
country
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. overall , the
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paid to
athletes
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is natural overcome in our society and it
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is one of
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form which should be
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by everyone
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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