Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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offered
young Change the verb form
offer
be offered
students
who has
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have
good
score . While Add an article
a good
,
a school of thought believe they might be accepted people in various age brackets whether they didn't have well academic performance at school . In Remove the comma
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for why
adolescent
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adolescents
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the door of Replace the word
opening
educational
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an educational
the educational
institution
for all Fix the agreement mistake
institutions
generation
. From an overall perspective , it is apparent that Fix the agreement mistake
generations
students
who at the spring age have had high- quality knowledge than others people . That is
to say , the state of valuable personal experience would be great
beneficial for universities even Change the adjective
greatly
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top-notch
top - notch
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top-notch
academy
. Fix the agreement mistake
academies
Moreover
, although
undergraduate students
might be distracted sometimes , they would be
know how to put a heavy emphasis on important things with Unnecessary verb
apply
highly
enthusiasm as they got Change the adverb
high
a
highest score in their performance . Change the article
the
For example
, despite many high - quality
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high-quality
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students
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other subjects
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks on
the phenomenon that pay an acceptance for all ages Change preposition
to
student
who didn't get a high Fix the agreement mistake
students
mark
. By way of illustration , they usually haven't had adequate Fix the agreement mistake
marks
skill
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skills
even
knowledge to survive in Correct word choice
or even
educational
atmosphere . Add an article
an educational
In other words
, this
aforementioned consequences would be caused a domino affects to a world difference Correct determiner usage
the
young
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in young
students
. In conclusion , it is my opinion that many education center
would Change to a plural noun
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be
only Unnecessary verb
apply
welcoming
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welcome
student
who has a
highest score without a doubt. I believe that Change the article
the
,
it would Remove the comma
apply
be reduce
the quality of education and the encouragement of top Change the verb form
reduce
student
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students
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
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