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Some people believe that the salaries paid to professional sportspeople are too high, while others argue that sports salaries are fair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has become a highly controversial issue that professional
athletes
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 are considered to be paid higher numbers than they deserve. In my opinion, I completely agree that
athletes
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 deserve to be paid more, and in
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 we will discuss both points of view. On the one hand,
athletes
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 do not create a lot of
jobs
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 or tangible benefits for society and individuals.
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, CEOs or businessmen get rich because they create a lot of
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 for other people. Professional musicians make money by attracting people to concerts.
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, certain
athletes
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 have difficulty getting people to pay to watch them compete, e.g.,
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in weightlifting
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,
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and triathlons
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, and they do not create a lot of
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 for society.
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, wages are paid by the market, and it is a purely market-based act. Many
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 earn high salaries by attracting large audiences,
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 as soccer players.
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, advertisers tend to invite
athletes
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 to endorse products, which is the main way
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 earn and
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 makes brand awareness and sales increase, allowing these companies to create more
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, which is a non-direct way to contribute to the country's economy. In general, the high salaries paid to
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 are a natural phenomenon in a free economic society and it is a form of success that should be respected by everyone.
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