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Some people have benefited from modern communications technology, but some other people have not benefited from; to what extend do you agree or disagree.

#people #communications #technology
Is modern technology as beneficial as people claim it is? It is a widely debated topic that the rise in advanced devices aid people in exchanging information. I strongly agree that these developments can be advantageous to individuals for the reasons outlined below.
Firstly
, space telecommunication systems have advanced over the years and
this
 can help in various methods. The rise in the use of modern
communication
 systems
have
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 aided space agencies to improve their knowledge about things occurring outside the Earth's atmosphere.
For example
, NASA has claimed that they have discovered water sources that originated
in
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 the Moon since their dispatch of the rover back in 2019.
Although
 space advancements are slow, we have significantly progressed over the past decade.
Furthermore
, discoveries about whether life can be supported on other planets can be awaited in the near future so that concerns over the growing population could be overcome.
Communication
 systems are more advanced than ever before. Modes
such
 as social media can be utilised so that people over large distances can communicate
over
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 the click of a button. Various features
such
 as video conferencing, video calling,
audio
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and audio
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 calling as well as voice and text messages can help in getting in touch with someone else across the planet.
For instance
,
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even though
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even though
 I live 4000 miles apart from my family, I can still stay connected through a simple phone call.
Moreover
, the
governments
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 investments in
installments
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 of satellites have
also
 reduced technical difficulties that could occur in return
improving
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communication
 and avoiding misinformation. In conclusion, due to the number of pros that modern technology provides, I believe that it is very essential to the public because of improved
communication
 for research purposes as well as private uses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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