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In today’s world, private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In the modern world, many individuals believe that the whole scientific
research
 should be invested by private enterprises rather than the
government
 in charge of it. I personally accept that the
research
 performed by companies may have some benefits, but I would agree that there are more drawbacks.
To begin
 with, If the companies do it by themselves it would be problematic for a number of reasons.
Firstly
, they have to spend a great amount of money on
research
 because it has a prohibitive price. Take investment money
for example
, the cost always counts by thousands or even
millions
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dollar
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 units
such
 as the price of rent laboratories and,
the
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cutting-edge
equipments
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equipment
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.
This
 could lead to a lack of capital sources and if they do not address it soon, the result would be bankruptcy.
Secondly
, time
would
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plays an important role in success because modern
researches
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research
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are
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is
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 mainly time-consuming so
they
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there
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 are
not
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 guarantees that future income
could
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 be able to cover the massive expenses.
However
, I strongly believe that the
government
 paying for
research
 offers more benefits.
This
 could be explained by the fact that the nation's sources are plentiful so
that
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they could
research
 various macroeconomic plans. A good example is that
outta
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space projects or eco-friendly environment projects would cost a host of money and they could do it without limit.
Furthermore
, the workforce for the
government
 accounts for a huge amount
in
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of
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 the country's population which is not lacking in brilliant ideas.
For instance
, the
major
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majority
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 of graduates with
high’s
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high
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 degrees always seeking a job
concern
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 with
government
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the government
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 where they could dedicate
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themselves for
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for
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to
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 their countries. In conclusion,
while
private-enterprises
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private enterprises
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 doing
research
 may not have more benefits, I
also
 believe that giving it to the
government
 would be beneficial to the nation's
developments
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development
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.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • groundbreaking technologies
  • efficiently allocate resources
  • innovative projects
  • strict timelines
  • profit motives
  • basic research
  • commercial application
  • corporate funding
  • biases in research
  • unbiased exploration
  • balanced exploration
  • public sector
  • private sector
  • synergy
  • comprehensive outcomes
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