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Some believe that technology, such as mobile phones, cell phones are destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that the advent of
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 as smartphones brings
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 countless merits.
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, it is
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 argued that it
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 ruined social interaction.
This
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interacts
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 with each other less than before. To commence with, it is irrefutable that
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technology
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 like a mobile phone can easily distract one's concentration. It makes
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 not focus on
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others'
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, they want to avoid meeting in person as much as possible. It's
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common these days to
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, the percentage of
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 who enjoy outdoor activities is gradually decreasing because they only like the joy of
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 given by cell
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 or computers. Due to the change, the emotional communion among
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 is almost disappeared. Another factor is that
people
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 do not need to depend on
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 anymore. On account of developed
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, the pleasure of interacting with
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 by chance disappeared.
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, we often used to get information by asking
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 for directions.
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, we have just used their map APP
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phones
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 nowadays. Customers
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, not directly from cafes.
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, there is no chance to interact
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technology
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hinder
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 interaction between
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. They want to replace all communication with
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 and
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 only on cell
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, not
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. Due to
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 reasons, I agree that as long as there is
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technology
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, humans will still
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 off in the future.
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