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One of the major issues facing the world today is overpopulating. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

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The population is
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 of the major issues in
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 modern era and the affair is faced by many nations.There are several problems associated with it.
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 essay will discuss the problem and measures to deal with it with examples in subsequent paragraphs.
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 with, the main argument for overpopulation is the exhaustion of natural resources and
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 job opportunities.
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 over
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 of all the resources, the standard of living of people has decreased.
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, there is an increase in unemployment as the number of employees is very less compared to the applicant's count. To cite an example, Bangladesh a country in South Asia is heavily affected by poverty, employment and economic crisis because it has the highest ratio of people per square foot area and is
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 of the most densely populated countries in the world.
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, overcrowding leads to the downfall of a nation.
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, the populace has to be brought under control and
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 can be done in several ways.First of all, the government should make it compulsory to limit the number of children in a family. To elaborate on it, people should be educated about family planning and advertisement can be done through television, newspapers and other major sources of spreading knowledge.
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, China was
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 of the overpopulated countries once, but
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 its policy and strict rule of not more than
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 child in a
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 it was able to overcome
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 major matter.
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,
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 topic can be controlled by proper measures. In conclusion, overcrowding is
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 of the major headaches faced by the world nowadays.
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 righteous majors need to be taken by both the Government and the individuals to curd it before it is too late.
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grammar
Ensure consistent use of articles (e.g., 'the' when needed) and avoid minor grammatical inaccuracies for better clarity.
development
Elaborate more on the solutions by providing specific examples or detailed steps that can be taken by the government and individuals.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear response to the prompt and addresses both the problems and solutions of overpopulation.
coherence and cohesion
The essay follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
task achievement
Good use of specific examples, such as the example of Bangladesh and China, to support the main points.
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