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why are many people dread growing old?what are the sorrow and joys of old age?

#people #dread #sorrow #joys #age
Surviving is the biggest and strongest instinct of humanity. So, from the
first
 of creation, mankind has struggled with
aging
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, meanwhile, they believe death is one stage after old age.
On the other hand
, some people think early
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 may lead to infirmities and lots of disabilities, and it makes them prone to be dependent. In
this
 essay, I will consider all parts of
aging
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 and its drawbacks and benefits. Based on the
first
 point of view about
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, and struggling to have a better life, people cant excuse their scare of death. So, they accumulate so much experience in
this
 battle, and it can be a relaxant in their pension life.
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, knowing will have to die soon or late, elderly people try to bequest a good name and experience to his/her relatives, and it can relieve their grief. On the other side, early
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 is caused lots of infirmities and latent organ damage, and our body is subject to be disabled to do our routine activities, as well as it making us either dependent or vulnerable.
Consequently
, regarding dependency, we have to consider lots of mental disorders like deep depression.
Such
 feelings can impose hopelessness and dire fear of early
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 on minds.
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