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SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT ADVERTISING IS EXTREMELY SUCCESSFUL AT PERSUADING US TO BUY THINGS. OTHER PEOPLE THINK THAT ADVERTISING IS SO COMMON THAT WE NO LONGER PAY ATTENTION. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Globally, there have been mixed opinions about the impact of advertisements, which can be visually or orally. Some
people
 support the
opinion
 that advertising helps in convincing
people
 to purchase a
product
, while others believe that
individuals
 disregard it. In
this
 essay, I will explain both points of view, as well as give my thought. In my
opinion
, displaying a
product
 visually encourages citizens to buy and try out items. On the one hand, some
people
 are of the view that the announcement of any item done, either through television or radio draws
people
's attention. They never forget the song attached to the commodity displayed, and
also
 the
product
 details( which can be what it does, how it can be used etc.).
For instance
, a recent survey carried out by Dettol soap showed that most purchases were done by
individuals
 who saw their
product
 commercial and wanted to give it a try because of its promises.
In addition
, it has been shown that
product
 announcements yield more sales, most times
people
 are inquisitive thereby buying the item unconsciously.
This
 shows that the visual display of the brand sticks in the mind of
people
, and they always remember the advertisement when it is seen.
On the other hand
, others argue that advertising is rampant and
people
 are no longer interested in it. They believe that there are numerous announcements of similar products in the market, thereby making them assume that are not different from the other one.
For example
, there are different companies that produce diapers, persuading citizens that theirs is the best in the market. Whereas there is no difference, which makes
individuals
 believe that their almost motive is money-making.
Furthermore
, they are of the
opinion
 that human beings buy products based on their preference, not
as a result
 of any publicity. In my
opinion
, I believe a poster brings about a form of awareness for an item, as well as assists
people
 in making positive decisions when shopping. In conclusion, It is seen that advertising convinces some
people
 to buy products, whereas other
individuals
 believe that all goods are the same, just buy the one you are comfortable with.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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