Today children spend more time watching TV. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?
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watching TV
channels. I believe that this
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theirselves
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Secondly
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children
children's
childrens
have less Correct your spelling
children
time
. In other words
, youngsters
after school
should do homework, also
do housework like taking Correct word choice
and also
rubbish
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Instead
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of doing their duty, they watch Correct your spelling
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tv
and waste their free time
on such
things. For example
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instance
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I got better and better grades.
In conclusion, watching tv
by youngsters
is good for develop
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
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- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...
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