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Today children spend more time watching TV. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

#children #time #tv
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youngsters
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their
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 free
time
 watching
TV
 channels. I believe that
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 outweigh the demerits.
Firstly
,
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 do not do personal growth. Every year, lots of schoolgoers after
school
 watch YouTube or Netflix. Most of them watch materials that do not develop
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themselves
theirselves
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. In spite
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of
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of
 the fact that
,
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 they do not
do
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progress, they become more stupid.
Reaserch
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Research
 shows, that children who watch
tv
instead
 of
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 out with peers get worst grades than their friends that go out together and
youngsters
 that spend most
their
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time
 on tb
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predisposition
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 to distract
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themselves
theirselves
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.
Secondly
,
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 have less
time
.
In other words
,
youngsters
 after
school
 should do homework,
also
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and also
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 do housework like taking
rubbish
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 out or vacuuming.
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Instead
Insted
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Instead
 of doing their duty, they watch
tv
 and waste their free
time
 on
such
 things.
For example
, my younger brother after
school
watch
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watches
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 lots of YouTube and
do
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 not spend
time
 on productive things;
moreover
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i
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 have to do his
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housework
house works
houseworks
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housework
.
On the other hand
, there is one major argument
on
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 watching
TV
. In
spote
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spite
 of the
fact
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 I said on
first
 demerits that youngster
waste
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wastes
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 their
time
. It may be good for them if they watch productive
chanells
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channels
 or news.
For
instance
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 I used to watch math lessons
,
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 because I didn't have knowledge but with
time
 I got better and better grades. In conclusion, watching
tv
 by
youngsters
 is good for
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developing
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themselves
theirselves
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themselves
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, but more of them spend their free
time
 and it may cause addiction and children can have
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problems
proplems
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problems
 with
school
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the school
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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