Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?

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lifestyle has become a common
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with the generation today.
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of unhealthy habits they continue to indulge in
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behaviour. In
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essay, I will discuss a few causes and solutions that could help deal with
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fast paced
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lifestyle the working class is constantly on a run to catch up with
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,
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leaves them stressed and disappointed leading them to indulge in bad habits like smoking and drinking.
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, unhealthy eating is another major concern of the masses.
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people prefer fast food to make up for the loss of time and eat while they are on the go. In my opinion, people
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do not
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do not
understand the underlying effects of unhealthy living since they live in the moment and
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do not
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understand its disadvantages in the long run.
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balance
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and give greater importance to themselves.
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exercising
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exercising
, eating healthy meals and
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any toxic intake.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • chemical reactions
  • dependency
  • social and cultural norms
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • temptations
  • implementing policies
  • taxing
  • supportive environment
  • accountability
  • unhealthy habits
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