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Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays the promotion of different products has increased largely due to modern technology. It is argued that
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 prevent
people
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 from being unique and make them want to do the same things. I do not quite agree with
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 view. In my opinion, advertising cannot really suppress the individuality of
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 modern technology has enabled adverts to reach all sections of
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society, they cannot fully take away the unique behaviours and characters of
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. They may wear clothes of the same colour and pattern;
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, the way they carry the dress is totally different.
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, we can dress up twins in similar attire but cannot control how they react or behave; it is totally their wish to be themselves. So,
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 cannot suppress / control individuality.
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, the advertisement has no control over the customers or how they take the products and
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 they cannot expect them to have the same mindset about their products. Every individual is different and unique both physically and mentally.
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 their way of thinking and using the product will be different. It all depends on the person.
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, a laptop can be used for many different purposes. So
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 will use them as they need for their unique purpose. So the advertisement cannot decide how
people
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 will use a product. In conclusion, even though
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 have grown hugely these days they cannot make
people
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 lose their uniqueness and characters.
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, I firmly disagree with the argument that
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 discourage
people
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 from being unique.
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