international sporting events such as the World Cup Footvall can bring people of different nationalities and cultures together far more than any other multinational gathering. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Various sports
organization
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are concentrating on organizing multinational
events
so that
it
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can bring
people
of different
nationalities
and
cultures
together far more than any other multinational gathering. I fully agree with the former statement. Both viewpoints will be elucidated in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly
,
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International sporting
events
like World Cup can help
of
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people
to understand about different
cultures
and
nationalities
of other
people
. As sport
is consider
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as
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one of the
medium
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to bring
people
together. To elucidate, International Cricket Council organizes these international
events
every four
year
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in
particular
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country so that other
people
at
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different nations can visit these
countries
and try to understand the culture and
nationalities
of these
countries
.
Moreover
, it
also
helped in increasing
in
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tourism in the country which leads to
understanding
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an understanding
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of
cultures
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the cultures
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of these
countries
.
Secondly
, it
also
helped in bringing
people
of different
countries
together to fight or
support
for
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the
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common cause.
For instance
,
Many
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countries
participating in the ICCI world cup 2020 players white
badge
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in
support
of the martyr victims
for
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war.
This
support
effort by players
help
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in increasing awareness among fans and worldwide.
As a result
, Many
people
put white stickers on their
shop
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or clothes in
support
of
this
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events
. In Conclusion. International
events
can help
people
in bringing
people
of multiple
nationalities
together. They will help in increasing understanding
about
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cultures
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the cultures
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of different
team
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and what traditions or rituals they follow in their country.
Moreover
, they
also
help in increasing awareness
for
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common
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the common
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cause
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causes
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around the world.
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