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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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Is experimenting on
animals
 good or bad? It is an often controversially debated topic
that
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 animal testing is justifiable or not. I
however
 believe that experimenting on living beings is not the answer to
experimentations
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experimentation
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 on medical
drugs
.
Firstly
, testing fresh
drugs
 on
animals
 induce immense pain
on
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in
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 these creatures. Us humans will never get to know the aches caused by the
drugs
 because it is
first
 tested on
animals
.
For instance
, it has been researched that 65% of test subjects die from
the
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immense pain rather than the failure of the
drug
.
Hence
, it is best to not put innocent creatures through hurtful experimentation.
Moreover
, the body systems of these creatures are different from that of human beings. So is it essentially beneficial to test on
animals
? If our body types are different, the effect
from
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 the
drug
 on each body is not the same. It is known that a fish has 4 hearts, whereas a human has one heart,
this
 would not test the effectiveness of the
drug
.
In addition
 to
this
, the biodiversity of a certain region would rapidly decrease due to the production of more and more
drugs
. The only alternative is to get volunteers from the general public.
This
 way consent is taken prior to being experimented on a certain
drug
. Governments can
also
 provide funds to these volunteers as a method of satisfying both parties.
This
 would prevent conflicts as consent is granted from the volunteer so that the
drug
 can be tested on them. In conclusion, animal experimentation can lead to induced pain and reduced biodiversity.
Therefore
, it should be deemed a more scarce method of testing for
drugs
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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