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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A quite large number of states are of the view that economic prosperity is their very significant target to achieve,
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however
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 some people generally, have the
opinion
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 that other aspects of
progress
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 are
similarly
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 vital for a
nation
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. In my
opinion
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, both views are equally crucial because, economic
progress
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 creates
conducive
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 environment for
citizens
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where as
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 other
progress
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such
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quality
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education
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system
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 could be of benefit to the
citizens
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, as
it
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will now be discussed in
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To begin
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 with, when a government think that economic
progress
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 is the most crucial goal, it is not far from wrong, because a prosperous
nation
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 means
a better lives
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a better life
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 for its people.
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, when a
country
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 is economically thriving, things are cheaper
to
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for
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 even the less fortunate. They are able to afford good food and access
quality
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 health care. More so, private investors are attracted to these countries. Majority of investors like countries
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 are economically stable in order to do business with them.
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, one could count the number of investors in a developed
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, quite a lot of them in comparison to a developing
country
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However
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, some people are
also
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 of the view that other types of
progress
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 in the
country
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such
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,
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good
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education
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system
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,
quality
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 healthcare, and
good
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sanitation
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system
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 are all significant. Having good policies that help promote both formal and informal
education
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 is
also
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 key in
regards
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 to growing an economy.
Healthy
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 lifestyle of
citizens
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 with
proper
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a proper
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sanitation
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system
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 can
also
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contributes
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 to a healthy
nation
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, which
at
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 the end leads to
strong
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 workforce. To conclude, the
opinion
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 from each side
are
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 equally paramount because, economic freedom and prosperity make
citizens
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 contempt
of
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their
nation
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, while other
progress
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such
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 as proper
sanitation
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 and a
well structured
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education
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system
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 help build the
country
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. In my
opinion
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, government officials should not focus only on building the
country
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 economically, but
also
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 take into account other
progress
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such
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 as easy accessibility of
quality
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 health care by all and proper
sanitation
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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