Some people believe that violent films are bad for you and encourage people to be violent. Others argue that violence and films are unrelated because violence existed before films. Which of these opinions do you agree with, and to what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge and experience.

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My impression is that violent
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are bad because I believe that
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violent
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,
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the film badly,
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as generally, when
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watch any action or violent scene,
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behave or feel aggressive. These
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patterns which effect
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violent movie may differ according to age groups. Especially,
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early age like 3-4
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old can easily be affected by violent
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and
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behaviour. So, there are many rules about
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which
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and accessible to all in many countries. These rules help
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to understand which film is the most suitable for families or
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. I have an experiment about the subject.
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summer, my nieces came to my house and they stayed for 15 days. During
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short period, I realized that violent
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and using technology how
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children
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. My
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, one’s name is Zeynep, 16
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old and the other’s name is Elif, 10
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old. They always watch
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via the Netflix platform. Especially, Zeynep started watching
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early age, approximately when she was 3-4
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old. My husband and I tried to watch only family
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and some cartoons without violent scenes with
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nieces during the holiday. My sister realized that
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how her
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behave kindly,
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. Clearly,
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children
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between violent and normal friendly
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. Some research about the
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violent
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.
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, some social research, about the
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's behaviour
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violent
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, put forward to
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behave can easily be affected by the
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. As I see it, there is no doubt that
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learn and teach some behaviours, including violence, to each other via
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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