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With more and more people communicating via computers and mobile telephones, there is a real danger that we are losing the ability to communicate with others face to face. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 technological era,
communication
 through the internet has increased over time. Nowadays, the population preferred to talk to each other by using laptops and cell phones.
Although
, many people argue that by
this
 method people are losing the ability to talk
face
 to
face
 but I disagree. In the following subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss my point with suitable examples.
To begin
 with, there are a lot of advantages of
communication
 via the internet. These days many students are studying far from their homes.
Therefore
, they feel homesick.
However
, they have the facility of cell phones and computers and can talk with their parents and siblings.
For instance
, children can talk to their family via video calls and can see their family members and talk as long as they want.
Moreover
, many youngsters are doing their jobs in foreign countries and they use mobile phones and Skype when they need to talk with their friends and family living in their country of origin.
In addition
, in the days of COVID many companies assigned work to their employees from home.
This
 is easy only possible by using technology.
Furthermore
, many people started online work and they use mobiles to talk to customers.
Furthermore
, they can work worldwide and communicate with foreigners which
enhance
Correct subject-verb agreement
enhances
show examples
 their skills of
communication
. In the conclusion, I argued that modern ways of
communication
 are enhancing our skills like speaking and listening.
Also
, these technologies have shortened distances. So, communicating through mobile and computer is much better than to
face
 to
face
communication
.
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