IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

Your friend has just had a new baby and you are having a party for them. Write a letter to another friend inviting them to the party and asking them to contribute to a present. In the letter, explain the reason for the party and the time of the party give directions to your house ask them to contribute money for a present   You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Mario, I hope
this
Linking Words
 letter finds you well. As you might know, John and Lara just have had a new baby! We are so excited that my wife and I decided to organize a party for their newborn. He's a male, and they decided to call him Paul. What a great name! With
this
Linking Words
 envelope, I would invite you to the celebration we've set up, which will take place at John's home, on Saturday 17th May. If you're not familiar
where
Change preposition
with where
show examples
 Paul's flat is, it is located exactly in front of the grocery store and beneath the 24/7 gym. If you arrive from Zurich, you will find the building one
kilometer
Change the spelling
kilometre
show examples
after
Change preposition
from
show examples
 the train station.
Also
Linking Words
, in the garden in front of the door, blue balloons will be placed. You can't go wrong!
In addition
Linking Words
, if you can't borrow your car, since we live only one quarter away from each other, you can come to me and I will drive you to the celebration. I live next to the New Arts Museum, and I'm pretty sure you know where it is. Let me know what
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
you prefer.
Sincerly
Correct your spelling
Sincerely
 yours, Matteo.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Consider revising the structure of your letter to create clearer separation of ideas, such as having dedicated paragraphs for the invitation and directions.
task achievement
Make sure to clarify the exact time of the party, as it was not mentioned in your letter. This information is essential for the reader.
tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is very appropriate for inviting a friend to a celebration.
clarity
You provided helpful directions, making it easy for your friend to find the location of the party.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: