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Transport delays and long journey are widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem, and how could the situation be improved?

#transport #delays #journey #phenomenon #cities #situation
Automobiles like
airoplanes
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aeroplanes
,ships,trains and cars are used for
estended
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extended
 journeys all over the world.
Quickest
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route
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routes
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 for railways and national highways have been created and maintained over time to smoothen
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land communication.
Eventually
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 airways and waterways are much faster
in
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compared
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 to
the
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other land mobiles.But,it seems noncompliance
to
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punctuality
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 of the vehicles
have
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 increased exponentially.According to a bird's eye view,there are
few
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 major reasons for
such
 delay and they can be controlled by certain methods. Within
last
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 few decades,there has been a huge increase in population all over the world.
As a result
,
this
 has
lead
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 to
surge
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a surge
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 in residential areas and
narrowing
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the narrowing
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 of empty lands and areas.
For example
,metropolitan cities like
mumbai
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Mumbai
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 face enormous traffic jams
on
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every
weekdays
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weekday
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 due to decreased roadways and more
number of
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personalised cars.On
a
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 contrary
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Mumbai
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mumbai
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 locals use trains more than
bus
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buses
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 or autos available.Unfortunately,due to
higher
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 population,the railways
gets
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 overloaded.
However
,other natural calamities like snow,
fogs
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fog
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 and mists
also
causes
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delay
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a delay
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 in
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long-distance
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long distance
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 travelling of passengers.Thankfully, developed countries have well
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equipped
equiped
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equipped
machineries
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machinery
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 to remove snow and
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advanced
adavnced
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advanced
 airways to take off and land during harsh winter and foggy climates.
Goverment
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Government
authories
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authorises
authorities
 all over the world must take
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the initiatives
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initiatives
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 of building more roadways and highways in both urban and rural areas for travelling.Reducing of usage of non-conventional automobiles must
also
 be
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encouraged
encourged
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encouraged
 more to reduce
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air pollution
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air-pollution
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air pollution
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 as well.
Therefore
,All of us have a role to play in reducing the delay in transportation both long and short
distance
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distances
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.If strict rules are maintained and executed,
then
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punctuality will be under control again.
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