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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There is a continuous debate on how to spend
money
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 on
transportation
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 means. While some
people
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 argue that considerable amounts of funds should be spent on railways for trains between cities, others believe that it is better to use
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money
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 for the enhancement of the current public
transportation
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 system. On the one hand, there are many
people
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 travelling between cities every day. In order to move them to their destinations a large number of
transportation
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 means are needed. If there was a way to transport more
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 in less time, the process would become more efficient.
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 is why some
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 think the expenditure of funds must be focused on building new railways suited for fast trains which can save a lot of time for travellers and reduce the number of possible accidents.
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, travels within the city are more frequent and most of the travellers are usually in a hurry.
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 is why some
people
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 believe that more
money
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 should be spent on improving the existing public
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 system.
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, if enhanced public transport is available at all times,
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 will prefer using it
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 of their personal cars.
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 will not only reduce the amount of traffic on the streets but
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, will have positive environmental effects.
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, air pollution, noise pollution, and the amount of greenhouse gas emissions will be reduced. In conclusion, while both views have their advantages, I believe it is better to use more
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 on the improvement and redevelopment of public transport since it is more commonly used.
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