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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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There is a continuous debate on how to spend
money
 on
transportation
 means. While some
people
 argue that considerable amounts of funds should be spent on railways for trains between cities, others believe that it is better to use
this
money
 for the enhancement of the current public
transportation
 system. On the one hand, there are many
people
 travelling between cities every day. In order to move them to their destinations a large number of
transportation
 means are needed. If there was a way to transport more
people
 in less time, the process would become more efficient.
This
 is why some
people
 think the expenditure of funds must be focused on building new railways suited for fast trains which can save a lot of time for travellers and reduce the number of possible accidents.
On the other hand
, travels within the city are more frequent and most of the travellers are usually in a hurry.
This
 is why some
people
 believe that more
money
 should be spent on improving the existing public
transportation
 system.
Moreover
, if enhanced public transport is available at all times,
people
 will prefer using it
instead
 of their personal cars.
This
 will not only reduce the amount of traffic on the streets but
also
, will have positive environmental effects.
For example
, air pollution, noise pollution, and the amount of greenhouse gas emissions will be reduced. In conclusion, while both views have their advantages, I believe it is better to use more
money
 on the improvement and redevelopment of public transport since it is more commonly used.
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