You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level. You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding a brochure I found at Sam's Bait Shop yesterday. It contained an itinerary for
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walking tour in the mountains near the river Yemena. I am interested
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a part of
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journey. As a nature-lover, I was excited to see that the tour includes camping near the foothills, by the river in the evening, and a bonfire
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night.
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, I did not find any specific details regarding the dates of the travel and the prices of the package. I would appreciate it if you could provide me with these details,
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other necessary information.
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, I wanted to bring to your attention that I am a senior citizen who recently had knee surgery, and I am concerned that I might not be able to maintain the same pace as the rest of the group. Could you please advise on
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matter? I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Krithi Santosh

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Task response: You answer all parts, but add a little more about why you want this tour.
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Task response: Ask more clear questions about price, dates, and what help is there for less fit people.
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Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but some phrases are not natural.
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Coherence and cohesion: Use simple and clear link words like also, however, and because.
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Task response: You cover all three points in the task.
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Task response: Your tone is polite and right for a formal letter.
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Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order.
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Coherence and cohesion: The opening and ending are good for this kind of letter.
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