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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#say #love #world #money #points
According to
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 history of mankind,
marriages
 for
love
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popularity only two centuries ago. To my mind,
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marriage for
love
 is a good option only for young couples.
Accordingly
, careless and possibly poor though the youngsters are, they are more concentrated on feelings towards each other rather than on property rights, financial welfare, and rules of inheritance.
However
, for people who are
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 all these things are essentially important. Young lovers are consumed with emotions, obviously not only because
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 age; they simply do not have anything valuable to share except
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their feelings.
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marriages
 for
love
 are usually spontaneous and conducted with hormones. Possibly
that is
 why they are frequently immensely short. Had it not been about rights and wealth,
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arranged marriage would have never become so widespread within human society.
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 always was considered
as
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an alternative to a military conflict, an efficient way for families to increase or just preserve their
ownings
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owners
awnings
. The longer we live and work, the more things we collect,
more
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the more
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 money we gain.
Therefore
, it seems clever to find
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av
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 suitable person, who will have the same position in the social world and share the same values.
Nevertheless
, mutual sympathy
often
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 presented, not being the main factor.
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marriages
 still are working like social elevators,
for example
 for spouses of famous people. To summarize,
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marriages
 for
love
 are risky and unreliable matters, based on a shifty human nature.
The arranged
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marriages
instead
 are supposed to be stable and more oriented on the future.
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