The gap between education in richer countries and education in poorer countries is a growing concern. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

In many
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all over the world today, they are many people who are
extreamly
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extremely
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education
.
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is because
a
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huge difference between wealthy
countries
and poorer
countries
and
this
gap
also
increasing dramatically in
this
recent
year
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.
This
is due to the fact that richer
countries
can approach
to
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the
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education
easier than poorer
countries
. One of the main causes of
this
gap is that wealthier
countries
can engage more in
education
than poorer
countries
. Between
two
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type
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of
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countries
, it's
obviously
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that wealthier
countries
have
many
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freedom to do anything they like. It
also
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cause
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from
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their affordable, while poorer
countries
have to
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several times
what
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about what
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they can afford or what
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they
that
thay
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they
can't.
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, parents
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richer
countries
can spend a lot of money
for
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their children's
education
experience to spend time with their fellow and take many
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for
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develop
in
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many
skill
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.
On the other hand
,
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parent
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parents
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from poorer
countries
don't have much money for
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education
just
have
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school
for
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study
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is enough for them.
Thus
,
this
reason leads to
gap
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in
the
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education
.
However
, it has many
way
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ways
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to deal with
this
situation.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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