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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. To what extent do you agree?

#people #life #skill #boys #girls #schools #waste #school #time
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adolescents especially the boys in
mixed sex
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school
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 as these classes or skills are equally significant for
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youngsters irrespective of their gender. I ,
however
, totally agree with
this
 provided assertion and I will illuminate with some logical reasons to support my opinion in the impending paragraphs. The
first
 and foremost reason is that most of the students are migrating abroad for their higher studies and career ,
therefore
, in order to
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 they must know about
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cooking skills so that their expenditures can be saved to a great extent
instead
 of spending their money on expensive ready meals and fast foods at expensive restaurants.
Moreover
, healthy and nutritious cooking aids
to
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the
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 healthy lifestyle and wellness .
Secondly
, there
are
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lot
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 of
scope
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 and enormous opportunities
in
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 hone science or
cooking
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the cooking
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 field.
For instance
, there are several eminent male chef personalities
such
 as Sanjeev Kapoor ,
Bikas
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 Khaana who adopt cooking as their career and
possessing
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the
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abdudunt
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abundant
 success as
this
 career is
also
 highly paid .
Therefore
,
the
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students must pursue
the
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cooking as their profession and must explore more and more opportunities for their bright future. Summing up, I reiterate my statement that in
21st
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 century, if both
gender
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are
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 equally treated
then
 some of the skills cooking ,
for
example
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 must
also
taught
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 to boys by their tutors at educational organizations and mothers at home as these
are not only remain
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do not only remain
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confirdy
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confined
 to the girls only.
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