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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more diadvantages?

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Nowadays one of the widely discussed issues is overworked
people
 are working a lot in their offices and spending less
time
 on their hobbies. It's undeniable that human performance has become an integral part of our life.
However
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 there is no absolute agreement as some
people
 find
it's
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 beneficial, while others consider everything associated with
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negatively
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. In
this
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 I will examine both pros and cons of
this
 controversial issue. There are a number of significant benefits of some companies
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 their overall performance to earn
bonuces
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bonuses
 and incentives.
For example
, in software companies, employees often spend most of their
time
 at work meeting goals and closing contracts.
This
 helps them in getting higher positions.
This
 will surely guarantee promotion or promotion. Turning to the other side of the argument, working long has several downsides given the hectic work schedule
people
 do not spare much
time
 for their hobbies or have very little
time
 for them. Another major disadvantage is
people
 lose health
as a result
 of overwork. According to the latest statistics, almost all working
people
 are bothered by health problems.
In addition
, the lack of
time
 to relax and enjoy has a negative effect on a person's mental health. It causes stress. Having weighed everything mentioned up I can come to
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 conclusion that it is a personal choice to make
time
 for fun activities or to work long hours. But I believe that
people
 should take
time
 for themselves. So I think there are more
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disadvantages
diadvantages
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disadvantages
 than advantages.
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