The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are numerous broadcasting networks across the globe and each and everyone has his or her own reliable sources
to
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get information
from
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. News are
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broadcasted
broadcast
day in and day out from around the world, which may be positive or negative. In my opinion, I do not concur
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the claim that, when
media
throw more light on problems
instead
of the pros of
society
, the individual and
society
in general
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will be affected.
Firstly
, letting individuals
aware
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of the challenges at hand will make them know what is at stake.
For instance
, the
media
focused more on the
outbreake
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outbreak
of
coronavirus
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pandemic.
This
way, people were more conscious to follow the World Health Organization's protocol in order to minimise the spread of the deadly virus. Again, when people have insight
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cancer
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of their
society
or country, they are able to contribute their quota in order to solve the issue,
For example
, giving out their opinions on the strategies or approaches in solving a particular problem on national crisis could be of help to the government or
society
.
Furthermore
, people would be aware of the current situation and how to go about it.
For example
, when there is a new trick that fraudsters use,
publicicing
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publicising
publicizing
this
report will make the individual security-conscious and will go a long way to help
society
at large. More so,
society
or the government, knowing the problems through the
media
, can change policies and strategies to curb the problem, enforcing rules and regulations, as well as knowing its weaknesses in the aspect of governance. To conclude, the
media
is one of the most readily available
source
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to obtain information.
Hence
, things that will promote the development and shape
the
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society
should be encouraged whereas unsavoury things discouraged.
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